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Too Much. Mar 26, 2004 23:34:06 GMT -5

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Post by Member26 on Mar 26, 2004 23:34:06 GMT -5

You know what the problem with your story is? You have too many characters, especially good guys. In a good story, you usually see like 2 to 5 good guys going against all odds, (meaning about 30 to 40 bad guys) to save the world. When you have more good then bad, it just makes it too awkward.

Maddik Council Member Come get some. Posts: 473	Too Much. Mar 27, 2004 21:24:11 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Maddik on Mar 27, 2004 21:24:11 GMT -5 He is right, there are a lot of characters that you put up in there. A story shouldn't center around that many characters, you know?

JAGuar Council Member Would you kill Jesus? Posts: 2,729	Too Much. Mar 28, 2004 0:03:21 GMT -5 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by JAGuar on Mar 28, 2004 0:03:21 GMT -5 Yeah, it did get kind of out of hand, didn't it?

Post by Member26 on Mar 26, 2004 23:34:06 GMT -5

Post by Maddik on Mar 27, 2004 21:24:11 GMT -5

Post by JAGuar on Mar 28, 2004 0:03:21 GMT -5