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Post by Bellagee on Nov 11, 2004 21:56:35 GMT -5
the trashy soaps reflect her dreams of sex and lies and mystery red lipstick paints on a fantasy going as deep as her shallow mind's shore smokey eyes seduce another dreamer captivated by her form, unscathed by that darling new perfume crimson nails match the lips that were once nicotine clawing at her throat, trying to release the sweet tunes they used to scream designer tags deceive the unprepared, along with the lovely imperfections she's quietly concealed caught offguard, romanced into her dreams, its countless those who have groveled at her knees her soft giggle pierces like a banshee's scream, her moans envelop even the toughest dreamer in her fantasy over the hill and half past gone, she can't forget when perfection was under her thumb the latest dreamer is tossed from the room, gone but not forgotten for every time she shows one of them what they want, with her fantasies moaned into ectasy she dabs on a bit more lipstick, and shaves off another layer of "you're too old for this."
Weird title, I know. Crit if you'd like, cause I know I'd like (:
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Post by JAGuar on Nov 12, 2004 16:14:10 GMT -5
I actually liked it. For some strange reason, I could put the lyrics with a Linkin Park song, so they're good enough for me. I give it 8/10 for being compatible with a professional's work.
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Post by madamemissoni90 on Nov 15, 2004 21:03:55 GMT -5
hhmmm....weirdo.....good, but weirdo....is this supposed to be about a hooker.... ? lol..................................hookas Pimp & His hooker
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Post by JAGuar on Nov 15, 2004 21:05:14 GMT -5
I really should get better emoticons.
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Post by Maddik on Nov 28, 2004 19:48:58 GMT -5
I'm still waiting for emoticons. By the way, the poem was off the hook, Bellagee.
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Post by Member26 on Nov 29, 2004 7:42:02 GMT -5
can we please get back to the poetry? i actually kind of liked it.
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Post by KWG 14 on Nov 30, 2004 19:25:33 GMT -5
Where's the lingerie that was promised?
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Post by Maddik on Dec 5, 2004 17:54:46 GMT -5
Dude, I told you to get over it.
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