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Post by LadyintheShadows on Feb 3, 2005 17:13:56 GMT -5
A little place Where the sun doesn't shine Is where I have hidden myself
In a little world Where lonliness rules Is where I have hidden my heart
By the river In the Land of Shadows Is where I have hidden My entire life
And there is the place Where I'll always be safe And no one can ever find
(AN: Some may think this is sad, but this is me.)
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Post by JAGuar on Feb 4, 2005 19:27:26 GMT -5
I know I've said this before, but I can't get over the fact that I actually understand what you're saying.
I've never really been one for poetry but I like your stuff better than most I've read, and I'm not just saying that.
However, since this whole "depression, hiding in shadows" type of poetry has been read by me so many times, I'd have to say it loses points for creativity. I thought your other one was better even though this one was good.
I give this one a 7/10. Keep up the good work.
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Post by Member26 on Feb 7, 2005 8:31:31 GMT -5
i agree, not as good as your other one, same reason. i read a lot of poems about death. i do like how you're not afraid to do a poem without a rhyme scheme, though, that's always cool.
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Post by Maddik on Feb 14, 2005 13:26:56 GMT -5
Yeah, I hate how people put 2 times as much effort into a poem just by trying to think of a way to make something rhyme. It's stupid.
This poem was good, though.
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Post by LadyintheShadows on Feb 16, 2005 15:15:37 GMT -5
Thanks so much everyone for all your thoughts. They really mean a lot to me. If anyone wants to read some of my other stuff, let me know please!
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