Voices of the night

[LadyintheShadows]

Walking down the riverbank
The wind rustling through the trees
Nighttime settling around
And the voices of the night
Begin to come alive all around

Walking down the riverbank
Listening to the voices of the night
And they swirl around
Into nothingness and everythingness

Sitting by the riverbank
Against a lonely tree
Hearing the voices of the night
Lulling things to sleep

Waking in the morning
Not by the riverbank
But in bed,
With nothing but thoughts
Of the voices of the night
That were only a dream

(AN: I don't know if this made sense to anyone, but it was just an inspiration while I was sitting at my computer. I hope you liked it.)

[JAGuar]

Yeah, there's only one thing I could suggest. You seemed to have a rhyme scheme going. Like you have the third line rhyming with the fifth in your first one and you have the second rhyming with the fourth in your third stanza. The one thing I can find wrong with this would have to be your lack of consistency. I realize you wrote this on a whim sort of thing, but most poets use the same amount of lines and the same rhyme scheme in all of their stanzas.

Don't believe me? Read Poe's "The Raven" You'll see that he uses six lines everytime(five long ones, one short one) and it's always the same lines rhyming.

I still liked it though.

I'd have to say 8 out of 10.

[LadyintheShadows]

Huh. Interesting of you to point that out. I didn't even notice it. LOL. Well, thanks for your compliment. I am glad that you liked it.

[Maddik]

Well look at our little Jag. All grown up and perceptive now. It happens so fast.

[LadyintheShadows]

LOL! I know....he's just growing up sooo fast.